Goals

1. Support the topic, give reasons why


2. Examples


3. Connect to literature


4. Better word choice


5. Transitions between paragraphs


6. Order of Paragraphs







Friday, March 9, 2012

Anna Fitzgerald

Authors Note- This piece is about Anna Fitzgerald, a character from My Sisters Keeper. My focus for this piece was using figurative language.


BAM, Anna Fitzgerald just walked into Asa Clark Middle School. All eyes were on her… who is this girl? Her slow walk, it looked as if she was trying to go unnoticed. The whole lower level of the school froze, and everybody looked at her. She was a medium height, and fairly a thin girl. The one thing that stood out was her pure brown hair, it was gorgeous! All the students were very welcoming to her. She looked like a really sweet and nice girl.

One girl noticed a distinct smell around and she asked if it was something Anna was wearing. It smelt as good as a freshly cleaned house.  Another thing  that stood out about her was her clothes, she was wearing a very fancy dress. Her clothes really stood out, they were as colorful as a rainbow.  She said it was her Chanel perfume that she had gotten for her birthday. Anna was as quiet as a mouse most of the time but there are other times that she can be very loud and attention seeking. No one knows much about Anna because she is very secretive about her life at home.  People don't know her life story, no one knows who she really is until they know about Kate and her family. Normally doesn't like to talk about Kate and how she has to give Bone Marrow and organs to her.

1 comment:

  1. You really know how to use figurative language! I could clearly choose a couple of Similes and Instantly saw an onomatopoeia. Great job!

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